{"id":899,"date":"2016-09-07T13:41:54","date_gmt":"2016-09-07T17:41:54","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/?p=899"},"modified":"2016-09-07T13:41:54","modified_gmt":"2016-09-07T17:41:54","slug":"budget-critiques-3","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/budget-critiques-3\/","title":{"rendered":"Budget critiques"},"content":{"rendered":"

I\u2019m assuming each of these entries has been submitted by a different student (given wording in the assignment) and am also working from the definition of \u201cbudget\u201d as given in Mod 4.\u00a0 With that in mind and from readings in Writing Tools,<\/em> I\u2019ll venture the following critiques:<\/p>\n

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  1. All of these budgets lack background stories from which to draw. Not only is the need for previous stories in the description we\u2019ve been given of budgets but would also constitute the gathering of \u201cstrings<\/strong>\u201d from which to build a story, as mentioned by Clark (writing tool 44<\/strong>).\u00a0 For instance, the budget for \u201cRush\u201d could include stories about effectiveness of physical activity to reduce stress, stress experienced by college students, and appeal of studios such as this (in compare\/contrast to other types of physical activity).\u00a0 The same could be said about each of the other budgets since none includes researched background.<\/li>\n
  2. It seems that each of these falls short on the identifying the point of the story<\/strong> (writing tool 42<\/strong>). Rush and Barre Exam both sound interesting but the proposals come across as promotions of a particular workout trend.\u00a0 There is probably a bigger story that would move them beyond sounding promotional or limited in scope to say something about the fitness\/lifestyle picture.\u00a0 The CAPS story seems more focused initially.\u00a0 Assuming that data upholds the statement about increasing usage of the counseling center, the questions posed are relevant and important.\u00a0 However, the question about eating disorders seems tacked on, without context.\u00a0 The proposal on the Indian Dance Revolution obviously appeals to a particular audience, which is not made clear; in addition, it does not lead anywhere.\u00a0 I feel bad for the teams that need help choreographing stunts \u2026 but the proposal doesn\u2019t tell us that help is on the way.\u00a0 The #Whoevers story also sounds interesting but could be more finely tuned to the point.\u00a0 It seems to focus on couples\u2019 and wedding planners\u2019 reactions, which are valid questions in themselves. \u00a0After all, maybe this would appear in a wedding planning publication (in which case it would also be interesting to consider how the couple would control guests use of technology!).\u00a0 But, a broader point could be how immersion in technology removes us from the moment, going beyond weddings to many other situations.<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n
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    1. Writing tool 40<\/strong>, from Clark, focuses on having a mission statement<\/strong> as a guiding principle. Having a mission helps to put individual stories within that broader framework.\u00a0 It\u2019s not possible to tell with any certainty from these brief budgets if an underlying mission has been developed.\u00a0 However, there are none apparent in any of them.\u00a0 As Clark suggested, it is a good question to consider at the onset.\u00a0 In the case of the Rush and Barre Exam proposals, for instance, a mission statement might help place these trends within the larger fitness picture, perhaps writing from the perspective that there is something for everyone and that each person can find what works best for him or her.<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

      I\u2019m assuming each of these entries has been submitted by a different student (given wording in the assignment) and am also working from the definition of \u201cbudget\u201d as given in Mod 4.\u00a0 With that in mind and from readings in Writing Tools, I\u2019ll venture the following critiques: All of these budgets lack background stories from … Continue reading Budget critiques<\/span><\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1997,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"_acf_changed":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_access":"","_jetpack_dont_email_post_to_subs":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_tier_id":0,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paywalled_content":false,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paid_content":false,"footnotes":"","jetpack_publicize_message":"","jetpack_publicize_feature_enabled":true,"jetpack_social_post_already_shared":true,"jetpack_social_options":{"image_generator_settings":{"template":"highway","default_image_id":0,"font":"","enabled":false},"version":2},"jetpack_post_was_ever_published":false},"categories":[19],"tags":[39],"class_list":["post-899","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-module-4","tag-budget-critiques"],"acf":[],"jetpack_publicize_connections":[],"jetpack_featured_media_url":"","jetpack_sharing_enabled":true,"jetpack_shortlink":"https:\/\/wp.me\/p7Ndkv-ev","jetpack-related-posts":[],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/899","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1997"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=899"}],"version-history":[{"count":0,"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/899\/revisions"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=899"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=899"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/ctlsites.uga.edu\/magwriting\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=899"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}